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- thelogicpuzzler
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Are you talking about doing a "comedic" monolouge, or just a light-hearted one? Monolouges I've used have been unisex. If you want a distinguished monolouge, try thinking about some things women are known for. I read one called "Dancing on Eggshells" by McCollough (sp?), and it was about a girl who wanted to have her hair great for prom. Her friend suggested she wash her hair with raw eggs for "body", and it ends up fried when she finishes with the blowdryer. It's funny. Also, what age group do you want to appeal to?
No, I haven't read anything by Steve Martin. I'm sure it was brilliant. He is always on his feet with something witty.
No, I haven't read anything by Steve Martin. I'm sure it was brilliant. He is always on his feet with something witty.
I'm here hoping to work on my Mystery Solving Skills!
- thelogicpuzzler
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- lonelyelendi
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I am not sure what I mean...I got something down but it was sexual satire...which I didn't intend. It was supposed to be a light-hearted thing about a young girl...it starts "Boys are so cute." but from there it went into how she uses her sexuality to manipulate her boyfriend. Definitely not what I intended! I was trying to write it for the teenage-young adult age group...sometimes I have trouble getting off of my soapbox hehehhe.
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- thelogicpuzzler
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I understand what you mean. Most of the monologues I do, for some reason, tend to be really mature. Writers are inclined to write about something that is universal, such as sexuality. The only way to avoid that with a teenage/ young adult female monologue is to have, maybe, a high school environment in mind. That way, it still seems innocent. Maybe even, do a "he said, she said" monologue. One that's like, "Well, she said that he said, blah blah blah, but apparently, I didn't hear it from him, got it?
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I'm trying to find a link for this guys' monologues that I use. I'll try to post it as soon as I can find one. It'll just give you an idea of what you can write without having to censor it for some audiences.


I'm trying to find a link for this guys' monologues that I use. I'll try to post it as soon as I can find one. It'll just give you an idea of what you can write without having to censor it for some audiences.
I'm here hoping to work on my Mystery Solving Skills!
- lonelyelendi
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Thanks. I have written monologues before that aren't sexual, or even vulgar, but I was trying to write one that was particularly for women. I think I just need to sit down knowing what the start and end will be like. That way I won't veer off into satire-land.
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- thelogicpuzzler
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- lonelyelendi
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I guess it is like a soliloquy. I have written them in the past...
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- thelogicpuzzler
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Well, I don't really know how to respond to that. But I guess all the media kinda brainwashed today's society, so what once sounded innocent, is a little raunchy. I was doing a read through with my fellow cast members, and every other line was seemingly thoughtful until someone said it the wrong way. The prince was trying to invite Cinderella to his graden, and she replies, "It isn't long, is it?", being concerned with getting out of there before 12.
Imagine the laugh fest we had. Now, my point, it's getting harder for people to say something (or in your case, write) that will go over a crowd easily. Just think, as innocent as Bree! Well, before all the dramatic stuff.

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- lonelyelendi
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Good point! I know that feeling...I wrote one short with the idea of having two people talking about something without saying it...and it apparently sounds like they are talking about sex. I wrote it without that intention. So, now, just being ambiguous is sexual >.>
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- thelogicpuzzler
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Well, the best bet after that point is to probably interview a female friend of yours face-to-face. Compare the characteristics of a man to a woman.That's the best way to get a realistic idea of what to write.
Sorry I took so long to post. I've been tired and busy lately.
Sorry I took so long to post. I've been tired and busy lately.

I'm here hoping to work on my Mystery Solving Skills!
- lonelyelendi
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Its no problem...I wrote one today...not gender specific... here it is:
Acting Philosophical
A short written by Kenneth Dale
Cast:
Philosopher
[LIGHTS UP.]
[We see a Philosopher (either a man or a woman, gender is irrelevant) standing in on an empty stage lit only by a single spotlight. The Philosopher is partly speaking to the audience, but also partly simply musing to him or herself, and is free to move about the stage as they feel it is appropriate. After a few moments of silence, the Philosopher suddenly breaks the tension:]
Philosopher: What is “acting”? [A beat] Isn’t it really just lying? Don’t we all lie every day of our lives? I mean, when you’re at the office and your boss Tim comes down the hall and smacks you on the arm and says “Hey there, Jim-bo,” don’t you force smile and a laugh and call him “Tim-bo” even though you know your name is Bob, and hell, you know that he knows you name is Bob? Isn’t that acting? Or is there something more that distinguishes between every other schmuck on this planet and an “actor”? I guess the real difference is the motive behind the lie; an actor lies out of a love for the lie. He, or she, lies not to gain anything for themselves, in fact, being an actor takes more out of a person than it gives to them, but rather, they lie for the benefit of others. There is one other factor that really separates acting from base lying; an audience knows that the actors are lying. They choose to believe the lie for the sake of entertainment. So then, an actor is an actor not because he or she acts, but because those being lied to choose to believe the lie. Therefore, no one can choose to be an actor, they must be appointed to that office.
[BLACKOUT.]
The End
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Acting Philosophical
A short written by Kenneth Dale
Cast:
Philosopher
[LIGHTS UP.]
[We see a Philosopher (either a man or a woman, gender is irrelevant) standing in on an empty stage lit only by a single spotlight. The Philosopher is partly speaking to the audience, but also partly simply musing to him or herself, and is free to move about the stage as they feel it is appropriate. After a few moments of silence, the Philosopher suddenly breaks the tension:]
Philosopher: What is “acting”? [A beat] Isn’t it really just lying? Don’t we all lie every day of our lives? I mean, when you’re at the office and your boss Tim comes down the hall and smacks you on the arm and says “Hey there, Jim-bo,” don’t you force smile and a laugh and call him “Tim-bo” even though you know your name is Bob, and hell, you know that he knows you name is Bob? Isn’t that acting? Or is there something more that distinguishes between every other schmuck on this planet and an “actor”? I guess the real difference is the motive behind the lie; an actor lies out of a love for the lie. He, or she, lies not to gain anything for themselves, in fact, being an actor takes more out of a person than it gives to them, but rather, they lie for the benefit of others. There is one other factor that really separates acting from base lying; an audience knows that the actors are lying. They choose to believe the lie for the sake of entertainment. So then, an actor is an actor not because he or she acts, but because those being lied to choose to believe the lie. Therefore, no one can choose to be an actor, they must be appointed to that office.
[BLACKOUT.]
The End
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My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- Kelly
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I don't have any info on Spring Awakening, but I do feel the need to jump in on a conversation about musical theatre! I adore musical theatre!
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Dr. Wilson: She's hot, so she's a hooker? What kind of pathetic logic is that?
Dr. House: The envious, jealous, I-never-got-any-in-high-school kind of logic, hello!
Dr. Wilson: She's hot, so she's a hooker? What kind of pathetic logic is that?
Dr. House: The envious, jealous, I-never-got-any-in-high-school kind of logic, hello!
- lonelyelendi
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Do you act or are you just a fan of musical theatre?
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
- Kelly
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I act. Mostly in really small productions...and I do Shakespeare in Stratford. I've been Lady Macbeth and Ophelia. Good times. I like doing musicals more though...I love to sing.
LG15 Defense Force -- Interrogation Specialist
Dr. Wilson: She's hot, so she's a hooker? What kind of pathetic logic is that?
Dr. House: The envious, jealous, I-never-got-any-in-high-school kind of logic, hello!
Dr. Wilson: She's hot, so she's a hooker? What kind of pathetic logic is that?
Dr. House: The envious, jealous, I-never-got-any-in-high-school kind of logic, hello!
- lonelyelendi
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Thats cool...I love acting too, and as you might have read I dabble in writing.
What shows, other than Hamletand Macbeth, have you been in?
What shows, other than Hamletand Macbeth, have you been in?
My plays: Random Incoherence
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth
'vote 'mute in '08!
Diane's adopted son
<marlasinger> i'll rape you!
<marlasinger> i mean
<marlasinger> damnit marla be smooth